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 Mok Chaoticran
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 Great Ape
 Mok Chaoticran
  Posted 01/03/2008 06:03:11 PM
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Current Main Characters:
Moc
Daisuke
XxUnknownxX
Erik
CK1


In this issue:Nothing too big,just a simple training match between Moc and Daisuke.

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Screw it,this is being changed into just practice.  

--Last edited by Mok Chaoticran on 2008-03-22 14:20:51 --

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 NS-Kage
 Posts : 2788
 Majin
 NS-Kage
  Posted 02/03/2008 01:49:14 PM
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Also the mistake i made, you should explain your characters more, cuz i have no fucking clue who mok and the other guy is, so not like, yo wanna train yeh sure [insert 12 pannels of training here] ok end of first issue, no you shoulds begin with introducing everybody a bit.

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 RPGHQBroly
 Posts : 1089
 Super Saiyan 2
 RPGHQBroly
  Posted 02/03/2008 02:28:57 PM
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It is averaging okay to me, but the text is kinba sloppy and as NS-Kage said, we have no clue who these guys are

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 The Heartless King
 Posts : 801
 Ultra Super Saiyan
 The Heartless King
  Posted 02/03/2008 05:14:19 PM
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i agree with kage

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 Bobinashoe
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 Super Saiyan 2
  Posted 17/03/2008 06:02:28 AM
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Agreed with Kage.

Most comics on Vortex have the one big flaw: Not introducing the characters, or barely doing so at all.

It's not hard to make a prologue comic introducing each character, the time in which the comic takes place, the story behind it, etc.

It's not bad, it just really needs a prologue issue.


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