i'm makein a new SS comic

Part 1.(DBZ univerese)
 You see vegeta and goku ntraing "kame hame ha"said goku as he chared his kamehame "Big bang attack"vegeta said as he lauched his attack.Then smoke appered everywhere,after the smoke was gone you see a portal "huh whats this vegeta"goku said as he came closer "how should i know kakarot"vegeta said as they both got sucked in "whoa!!"goku said as the wentthrough the portal

Part 2.(Sonic Univeres
"ha!!"sonic said as he punched shadow "urgh,stupid hegehog"shadow said as he charged up an attack "Whats wrong shadow too tired"sonic sad as he sat down "ha!!"shadow said as he transformed into super shadow "oh so thats how you wanna play"said said as he also transformed,shadow jumped up in the air and kicked sonic 5 times "urgh"sonic said as smoke apperaed "Ha!'sonic said as he send a blast to shadow then the portal apperaed 'huh"shadow said as sonics attack wasa sucked into the portal "what happed"sonic said as he scrathed his head he came closer and was sucked in "uh sonic"shadow said as he jumped in after him.

Part 3.(KH Univerese)
"zz"sora said aas he sleeped "sora wake up"riku said as he sat down at the beach 'huh oh yeah i guess i doesed off"sora said as he looked further into the sea "hey riku whats that"sora said as the thing came closer "it looks like a portal"they said as they got up and ran to it after they came close they got sucked in.

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--Last edited by The Heartless King on 2008-03-16 19:57:45 --

im guna wait for the story before i submit

kk i understand i'm still working on it plusd i have to find some flaws

Updated first post

it seems to be an alrite story i supose

like i said it has a few flaws if you can point some out plz do