Making a new sprite comic  give it abit  

--Last edited by Savagesaiyankiller on 2008-03-21 02:42:37 --

I'm sorry but is this a joke?
I'm going to be completely true about this.

It's got an extremely crummy storyline, it's horribly made, and I can just expect where this is going..

The faceset for the Goten recolor doesn't resemble the actual character at all whatsoever, The story is beyond boring\stupid\generic, I could pretty much guess what they would say 4 panels before it'd even happen, you overused exclamation points..

He doesn't even explain his name to him when he asks, he randomly invites him to him to help save the earth, he magically knows his friend is dying, random aura, Mokan changes from a weird goten headswap to a teen Goten recolor that doesn't resemble the original at ALL, and you even asked the viewer to submit there sheets.

And, to top it all off, you've barely explained any of the story. What you really need to start fixing is explaining the story in further detail then in less then 100 words..

Please.. Use common sense..

I know i'm being harsh. But this is just a mess. Please, take a look at this topic for some tips..

http://dbzvortex.aceboard.com/229463-4197-13212-0-Comic-Theory-some-thought-into.htm

bob is totally right about it al im agree with him for total 100%
because you put in please sign up your chars but nobody will do it if they see this..

Oh well?do i care.